17A: Elevator Pitch 2
1. https://youtu.be/Kekz7-mMWRU
2. I did not get any feedback from my first video, so I had my roommates look at it and tell me what to change. They said I seemed nervous, so I decided to record myself this time. I think I was also less nervous this time because I have now been doing this assignment for most of the semester. My pitch last time was 75 seconds so this time I made it 90 seconds. I also tried to say what I think the biggest hump of this opportunity would be so people would be more aware and feel more connected.
3. I just changed these few things, maybe I will get feedback from someone from this class this time so I know what to better improve on for the next time.
2. I did not get any feedback from my first video, so I had my roommates look at it and tell me what to change. They said I seemed nervous, so I decided to record myself this time. I think I was also less nervous this time because I have now been doing this assignment for most of the semester. My pitch last time was 75 seconds so this time I made it 90 seconds. I also tried to say what I think the biggest hump of this opportunity would be so people would be more aware and feel more connected.
3. I just changed these few things, maybe I will get feedback from someone from this class this time so I know what to better improve on for the next time.
This idea is actually a fantastic idea. This is the most feasible and most realistic idea I have heard yet. Not only is the idea simple but it is also great for the community and those with disabilities. I know if I heard about this I would jump at the chance to go to this store. I like how you started off with a scenario and related to our every day lives. This really made your idea relatable. I think the only thing I would add is putting in something about how you would go about creating the idea, making money and your name. Other than that this was excellent!
ReplyDeleteHi Logan, I thought that you did great in your elevator pitch. You asked a question in the beginning of your video that made me think about life without college or life after. I thought that you spoke clearly and at a good speed. I really like your idea and would go to that coffee shop every day. Many people think that people with disabilities are below us or that they aren't smart when in fact they are more intelligent than most.
ReplyDeleteHey Dylan!
ReplyDeleteYour elevator pitch this time is a lot more improved than last! I do wish that you were looking into the camera though, but i understand the difficulty of there not being an actual person in front of you. Your inflection and tone in your voice was really awesome. You weren't speaking too quickly and you weren't speaking too slowly, it was a good speed. I think all the information you gave was a good and accurate description of your product.
Good Job!